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PostSubject: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:22 pm

i will post the first chapter of my story and then u all can tell me if i should continue or quit writing stories.

Once long ago in a small town on the edge of France there lived a poor family. A widow and her two children lived in the streets all year long with only a dollar left to buy food, thin clothing, and little paper dolls fot the widow's young daughter,Sophia. Sophia though didint even look as though she was poor with her dress of pink cloth and her matching jacket and purse. She wore lace socks and white polished leather shoes.

It was a sad winter for their little family. Sophia had to take care of her little berother, Matthew (Mat), while their mother rested. Their father had died 5 months ago and the widow was about to have another child.

With only a dollar to their family, Sophia planned to sell her jacket, purse, and paper dolls to buy food and baby clothes. She would keep one doll for the baby when it grew ( if it was a girl).

With her father dead, Sophia was to help as much as possible with her little brother.Her father died of a sickness that was going aroung all of France. Mat got the sickness shortly after the death of their father.
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:27 pm

This is genius!! ^^
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:29 pm

i rate it 9/10 =D

please finish it =D
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:37 pm

1000000000/10 =D
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:39 pm

10/10. ^^

Please continue. Very Happy
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:45 pm

9.5/10

I fell bad for her family shes been through some tough times
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 6:49 pm

my sis is a natural born story teller
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 7:21 pm

i agree 100 % with pika
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PostSubject: Re: my story   Tue Mar 09, 2010 7:39 pm

no no no no no u all are gonna rui my rep
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